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okay guys ive been working on this one for a while and ive finally finished it yay.

here is the best recording I could make tonight I am sure ill make a beter one in the future but this will do for now.

I hope you all enjoy please tell me what you think lots of feedback would be appreciated

http://soundcloud.com/jwerta/let

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yeah, jwerta's a dreamer <___base_url___>/uploads/emoticons/default_smile.png

people will want to nit pick things about your upload mang but the sheer fact you added your lyrics to the track added value to my listening pleasure. Sab is blessed with many music makers but not many put words/their own lyrics to their music.

i think Botanika ..cool guitar sounds and groovin on out.

and mutant(undecipherable Greek-lol) was the last singing i heard here at sab......although mutant was more rapping in wog than singing a ballad.

It's really enjoyable to hear songs or spoken word from members here and wish more would marry musical sounds to spoken word expressionisms.

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Good on you jwerta <___base_url___>/uploads/emoticons/default_smile.png <___base_url___>/uploads/emoticons/default_smile.png <___base_url___>/uploads/emoticons/default_smile.png

Thanks for sharing.

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Cool.

I've still got your song going around in my head. That may not sound impressive considering that I only listened to it some ten minutes ago, but taking into account my 90 second memory, it's a good sign!!

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lyrics

Let’s go towards the vivid

Kaleidoscopic light.

Consciousness expanding

On the edge of night.

Organisms shifting,

Chanting and dancing .

On the hill we rise

Towards the light .

silky silver Moon

You shine so bright.

When I see your face

You invoke delight .

Pacify me

In your arms.

Suddenly I see you

Standing there.

On the threshold

Of existence.

When you see me

I concentrate,

On the feelings

Inside of me.

Gravity is pulling

On my soul.

Making love to my

Mortal being.

Twisting and falling

Over you.

Soon we will

Encounter truth

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i notice you ommited the lyrical passage about the great dionysus, a shame

nah, good effort man, nice to hear a somewhat finished product of something you were discussing with us only the other day. quality of music aside (albeit of good quality) your ability to actualy finish it and willingness to upload for us is impressive in its self

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Hey man, I really loved it aye! Which chords were you using? I'm not good enough to pick them up by ear. Mostly minors, and 7ths I think?

Lastly, I hope you don't take this the wrong way, but I think you will benefit a lot from practicing to make your voice resonate with your guitar playing. There's a good technique called 'drone singing', and it's one way to practice.

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Thanks I'm not quite sure what chords they are lol one is a sort of d and the other is a sort of a and there is a sorted e there and the final one is a g7

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Yeah, I checked on my guitar, and I think there's a Dmaj6 (xx0202), and an Am/maj7(x02010)

I think hear a C in there twice~ (x32010), but I'm not sure.

Is that right? :D

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got a new one up guys... need to to a better recording but this one will do for now i guess

https://soundcloud.com/jwerta/amor

Life was great nothing could get me down

But somehow it all just seemed to turn around

It was all good it was all fun

And then you shot me to the ground

I didn’t think it would end the way it did

I didn’t think it would hurt the way it did

Everything happens for a reason

Its just like the end of a season

So its okay its all right

I just think of al the good times we had

When we went to that hotel

That was the best time of my life

I hope you enjoyed my company

The same way I enjoyed yours

When we dreamt with that cactus

That was the best time of my life

I didn’t think it would end the way it did

I didn’t think it would hurt the way it did

Everything happens for a reason

Its just like the end of a season

Life was great nothing could get me down

But somehow it all just seemed to turn around

It was all good it was all fun

And then you shot me to the ground

I didn’t think it would end the way it did

I didn’t think it would hurt the way it did

Everything happens for a reason

Its just like the end of a season

So its okay its all right

I just think of al the good times we had

When we went to that hotel

That was the best time of my life

I hope you enjoyed my company

The same way I enjoyed yours

When we dreamt with that cactus

That was the best time of my life

I didn’t think it would end the way it did

I didn’t think it would hurt the way it did

Everything happens for a reason

Its just like the end of a season

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Time for a guitar battle between Jwerta and PH! <___base_url___>/uploads/emoticons/default_smile.png Would make good tunes.

i funkn agree.

i'll even post some sample lyrics and ph and jwerts can enter a version each .........if they dare....mwwaaa mwaahh hhhaaaahaaa......i've a got a creepy song just waitn for someone to add some music to it

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