wert Posted February 1, 2016 Ok guys n gals here's a poem I wrote a while back. Hope you enjoy it. Otherwise just call it horse shit n start a fight. Every Father, One Son. Written by wert. A new day comes with a birth of a son; this is a great, great, great, grandfather's grandson. Morphing genomes exploit extravagant grand sums before genomics song would soon have been sung. While the clock keeps ticking and hearts still beating, theres a new sound being added to the song. Like the music of life in everyone, I hear a fresh new rhythm of a little heartbeat in a fresh new son... Can you hear me, are you listening, Me in you, we can build anything. Did you hear this, can you believe that, I give you love so you can give it back. open your eyes, look at me clearly, This is within us where we overlap, Reach out to me, take my hand, Together as one we will understand. My father to me, like his father to he, Building your essence from our history. It's your right, this is why I try, Giving to sons before our final sunrise. The art within life, fighting to survive, A fathers a son before his son arrives. Like a reflection of me, just as I see, Your the only thing your sons will ever need. Just as our fathers had taken the lead it was my time now to help a son so he could succeed. It was time to retrieve the tool in me and put it to a son for a son to concieve. And like my father had said, I thought of my son as a father instead as it was here in my hands lay a son's fathers head. Along came a tool from a book not read, the fruit of life from a fruit not fed, our fathers spoke forward upon our son... Don't forget who you are; your your fathers son (as well as our friend) Can you hear me, are you listening, Me in you, we can build anything. Did you hear this, can you believe that, I give you love so you can give it back. Open your eyes, look at me clearly, This is within us, where we overlap. Reach out to me, take my hand, Together as one we will understand. My father to me, like his father to he, Building your essence from our history. It's your right, this is why I try, Giving to sons before our final sunrise. The art within life, fighting to survive, A fathers a son before his son arrives. Like a reflection of me, just as I see, Your the only thing your sons will ever need. As my son emerged from all the fathers and there grand sum, He looked at me and smiled saying daddy thats dumb... As a tear fell from within the sum, he asked "why is it so we are father and son when it's pretty obvious dad we are really only one". And as the tear fell further and my smile widened... I looked deeper into the eyes of my son. Pleased to meet you finally long after it all begun, your my friend, my son, Your just like me... we are only one. And as a tear fell from and eye within our son. A smile grew wider and from within came a sum. Well if I'm one, within such a sum then in knowing this I can now love everyone. And thats the beauty between fathers and a son. The clock keeps ticking while hearts cease to run, Though a page is turned for every son, alongside a tool that can build enough space for us all to become one. Wert. 13/07/2013 there you go, there may be errors in spelling and other shit cause I had to re write it on my phone. Took forever n ever... kindof Wert himself. P.S. has been copyright in a certain way. 11 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Halcyon Daze Posted February 1, 2016 (edited) Great honesty/ introspect. Bravo What are your artistic influences, wert? Edited February 1, 2016 by Halcyon Daze Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
wert Posted February 1, 2016 (edited) Pain and suffering. People weaker than I, thats pretty weak. The augmentation religion has on separating people. Edited to remove vulgar language and expressions of deep deep mental illness. Edited February 1, 2016 by wert Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Halcyon Daze Posted February 1, 2016 (edited) Duuuuuuuuude... Edited February 3, 2016 by Halcyon Daze Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
paradox Posted February 2, 2016 i like it bro, i get a bit of a vibe of edgar allen poe crossed with banjo patterson.. or something along those lines.. nice work! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
starling Posted February 4, 2016 There's a lot I like about this wert. I think with some revision you could have something really great here. And I commend you for being a caring father--I never had one of those. s Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
wert Posted February 5, 2016 Yeah starling. Thanks for replying to PM. And I told you I wouldn't be changing it anyways. Btw my father died at a young age. I didn't really get to learn alot from him. I don't have any sons. It just a poem that I wrote a few years ago. Before I even had kids. I think I prefer my own revision of my own works that way it stays original and not capitalized or whatever. So you can call it horse shit in its current state. 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
woodwoman Posted February 5, 2016 Solid subject! Yet it was far from looking at a photo of it. Abstract like a fractal pattern. Powerfully brilliant bro. 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
wert Posted February 6, 2016 Solid subject! Yet it was far from looking at a photo of it. Abstract like a fractal pattern.7-Generation.png Powerfully brilliant bro. This is how we comend each other round these traps starling. Further reading of your contributions to this site so far has made me think of you as a bit of a twat really. I never asked for the help you offered, and I dont think woodwoman did either. You can't just jump into a crowd thats dancing to a rhythm and start pogo-ing in the middle all out of time n shit. 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
starling Posted February 12, 2016 (edited) This is how we comend each other round these traps starling. Further reading of your contributions to this site so far has made me think of you as a bit of a twat really. I never asked for the help you offered, and I dont think woodwoman did either. You can't just jump into a crowd thats dancing to a rhythm and start pogo-ing in the middle all out of time n shit. Well, I really don't know what to make of this. So basically, because I offered some advice on writing poetry, based off what I've found to be true, and then payed you a compliment (and woodwoman) I get called a twat? This is indeed a very bizarre place. And for the record Wert, I was asked to give my reasoning on why I don't go in for psychotropic drug usage and the culture that goes along with it. I said I'd rather not, because the post would simply be deleted--which kind of did happen, it got moved to degenerated and I got a week long ban, despite the fact that I made no personal attacks and got called a trolling wanker who has probably shoved too much DMT up his ass--by the very people who sought clarification on the issue, no less. So basically, I got a ban for giving my reasoning on a subject I was asked to give. Honestly, this site is totally fucked. The supposed open-mindedness that is espoused is pure bullshit, because being open minded and censorship cannot, and do not, coexist. And I was censored for giving an opinion. And now you call me a twat for paying you a compliment and trying to help you out with poetic forms. Well, fuck this place. You are all useless degenerate drug addicts who have fucked yourselves up so much that you have not only lost the ability to think, or create anything interesting, but can no longer participate in standard intellectual discussions or even basic social conventions based on mutual exchange in any way. You are, quite simply people, the walking fucking dead. And such people are not worthy of my time. Good luck with it all Wert. Edited February 12, 2016 by starling Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
wert Posted February 12, 2016 (edited) Man you just went overboard. And for someone as educated now and acquiring further... I'm surprized you managed to fire up a bunch of friendly bunch to the point of a retarded childish argument were your knowledge of content is restricted because of you pre determined bias... against those who... blatently, mate, know better. If your comming back don't be a dickhead and offer legal advice if your so inclined in the appropriate forum but don't start shit fights about psychedelics and the unknown that draws alot of inspiration to the happy healthy contributors of this community. Basically you went up the tree with me rather than down the rabbit hole. Edit: twat. Edited February 12, 2016 by wert Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
wert Posted February 12, 2016 (edited) You type quick cunt now fuck off. And good luck with all that legal stuff cause your shits all like fucked up n that. Your potentially tarded man. Edited February 12, 2016 by wert Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
waterboy 2.0 Posted February 12, 2016 (edited) bit harsh wert.....lol ...but there you go off the handle again starling.....*shakes head You are all useless degenerate drug addicts who have fucked yourselves up so much that you have not only lost the ability to think, or create anything interesting, but can no longer participate in standard intellectual discussions or even basic social conventions based on mutual exchange in any way. Its pretty fckd when I am playin peacemaker. WB EDIT - really liked your poem wert Edited February 12, 2016 by waterboy 2.0 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
waterboy 2.0 Posted February 12, 2016 And such people are not worthy of my time. you flatter yourself Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
wert Posted February 12, 2016 Why thank you waterboy. I think we share some common interests. One or two at least. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
wert Posted February 12, 2016 Shit hot! Lets not get this locked. Mods at my request leave this thread be and become. I will edit the thread title to most entertaining poetic thread on sab first. Please. 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Sallubrious Posted February 12, 2016 It did seem like a harsh reaction wert, I could have missed something but all I saw was starling trying to help you. I would have defended myself if someone lashed out at me like that too. & I liked your poem too. I don't care much for conventions or technical proficiency, it conveyed a deep emotional message & not many people have the balls to expose themselves like that. 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Sallubrious Posted February 12, 2016 (edited) Did anyone ever see Adam Hills' sketch where he made a break about sign language because he had signer relaying his comments to deaf people and it reminded him of something quintessentially Australian ? Apparently Australia is the only country with a sign for "fuck you and fuck the lot of the you". The signer first holds one middle finger up to the assailant and then holds both up to the whole crowd and moves them side to side for all to see. If someone is verbally attacked in the pub, it's a typically Aussie response and no-one holds that against them for more than a few seconds. I see starlings' comments as a parallel to that (albeit taken a bit further), so let the ego go for a minute and see it for what it is. Edited February 12, 2016 by Sallubrious 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
wert Posted February 12, 2016 Theres another thread sal about current australian poetry contests... Starlight was helpfull but missed my point when I said I wouldn't change it. It's like if you build a v8 out of twin hayabusa engines n tune it up n paint it I dunno rainbow. Then go show your mates n there all like should have mounted it using a shifter not a spanner? And your like? Wtf? I'm showing you my art bro not a replication of a factory assembled machine. Kindof stuff. Anyway guys I'm of to the big institutions shortly and I'm off to bed now. Had my alcy for the night. And my temtabs. Call em drugs starlight. Starlight shining throughout the night, monday morning don't fuck up your caffeine intake alright. Night freinds n lovers... you know who you are... yes you do. Yeah ya do dooz. Zzz 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Sallubrious Posted February 12, 2016 I hope I didn't sound like I was criticising anything you've said wert. I wasn't bro, I was just trying to be objective. Sorry to hear what you're going through wert, I really hope you can come through this testing time a better man. Can I send you a few pieces of literature that could possibly give you a different focus before you go in. It's not any spiritual BS, it's a few books written by someone who's done hard time in US supermax prisons. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
wert Posted February 12, 2016 Nope you haven't offended me at all sal. And I think I may have? Confused you with someone else on here when something about a name change was mentioned. I think you are right. I've been told on many occasions not to post here under the influence. Lol or "off chops" It's all good starling may have had good intentions but his commitments toward woodwoman and I and our poetry were just a little over the top and he/she presented like the poetry police witch did not offend me it just pissed me off because I had already explained the condition of not changing it... and he well, stood on my toes like I'de broken some law and needed to rectify it for acceptability. Thats all. And he does present himself as a bit of a wank#r also.lol Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
etherealdrifter Posted February 13, 2016 (edited) Edited February 13, 2016 by etherealdrifter 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
slice Posted February 18, 2016 (edited) nice poem, but, isn't it confusing how humanity goes from love to hate that easily? Maybe that´s the reason we are condemned. I am right, you are wrong! I was pleased to read the text, got me reflecting of my recently deceased father and my very young son. To say a comment, the thread went from nobility of heart to existential misery, a simple example of humanity, just insane. Edited February 19, 2016 by Ogun 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
~shameless~ Posted February 19, 2016 Its really nice wert, Although iv never met you i think you would be a really decent man, Im not a father myself, but if i become one i hope i can approach the role the way you have described. Cheers. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites